Ignore the stars, please. I don't use them. :U
I like your fire effect. However, though it looks nice, it doesn't really show fire. I didn't realise it was fire until I read your description. D: [link] There is a fire tutorial at the very bottom, though you should read all of the tutorials because they are awesome.
Here are a few things you need to work on.
Your lines are really stiff, especially in the eyes. Try making quick, dynamic strokes and try zooming in so that your lines are smoother! I don't think you have a tablet, which might be why your lines don't have width variation. Investing in one would be good.
Your coloring/painting is a bit choppy. Just like how I talked about smoother lines, you need smoother painting, especially hear her neck, where I can see partly transparent brush strokes. Smooth lines and smooth painting is really important for hair, which is basically... smooth... dead cells. But hair is dynamic and wooshy. [link] LOOK AT THE SMOOTH LINES, GRAH.
As for your drawing itself, her irises are nice (good blending there), but try making the lower eyelash thinner than the top. It might just be me, but it looks like she has bags under her eyes. Unless that was intended. You might also want to define the shoulders and the collar of the shirt more, as they aren't very clear. There's also a lack of emotion in her expression. Reference pictures of sad people! Anatomy and drawing and et cetera can be answered by tutorials, which you can find anywhere, so I won't go into that.
You might want to remove the text. Adding that kind of text to an image (where the words are illustrated obviously, such as burning and fire) is like labeling a can with the word "can." If you want to keep it, at least make it more legible and grammatically correct. I don't care much for perfect grammar, but imagine a dramatic scene in which a hero and villain are facing off and giving their pre-battle speeches, and then someone stutters and messes up their line. It's like that. As for making it more legible and purdy-lookin', don't center the text on the bottom. It looks like a caption that way. D: And with that font, you might want to add a stroke or an outer glow to it. Here are examples of good text: [link] [link] .
The last thing I would like to address is the lack of clarity. Your drawing should be able to support itself without the text— in other words, is your message clear? The point is that you should be able to tell a visual story that is expanded by writing. =liyaperfidious does this amazingly: [link] [link]
You shouldn't have to explain your symbolism, nor should you have to tell me what the things are. They are there for the the viewer to figure out. What shows love? Breaking? Burning? Ending?
Thanks for taking the time to read my critique!
Thank you very much for the detailed critique.
I'll try very hard to improve as much as I can and think about what you've said (:
By the way none of your links worked >w<